Comments for I am ready _ http://thewritinggame.wordpress.com User submitted musings Mon, 05 Oct 2009 09:48:41 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 Comment on poonicorn stand by SAm And Toz http://thewritinggame.wordpress.com/2008/07/21/poonicorn-stand/#comment-709 SAm And Toz Mon, 05 Oct 2009 09:48:41 +0000 http://thewritinggame.wordpress.com/?p=190#comment-709 OH MY GOD I HAVE FOUND ENLIGHTENMENT BABY! OH MY GOD I HAVE FOUND ENLIGHTENMENT BABY!

]]> Comment on tentacles by breeandjames http://thewritinggame.wordpress.com/2007/02/27/tentacles/#comment-708 breeandjames Sat, 26 Sep 2009 06:27:15 +0000 http://thewritinggame.wordpress.com/2007/02/27/tentacles/#comment-708 Last Version: my sea star sister is an evaporating tide pool, so badly wishing she were an anemone saran wrap caped crown of empty six pack, i am the urchin and you are a dogfish, your heaven is two miles offshore we are both seven, your red skin lies next to last night's bonfire, torn as a geoduck is unsheathed, two fish that aren't; scaling and trolling hungrily for a muscle to cleave consumeconsume consume -- tjq edit 2/27/07 changed second couplet old: a saran wrap cape crowned in an empty six pack Last Version:

my sea star sister is an evaporating tide pool,
so badly wishing she were an anemone

saran wrap caped
crown of empty six pack,

i am the urchin and you are a dogfish,
your heaven is two miles offshore
we are both seven, your red skin lies
next to last night’s bonfire,
torn as a geoduck

is unsheathed,

two fish that aren’t;
scaling and trolling hungrily for a muscle
to cleave
consumeconsume consume

–

tjq

edit 2/27/07 changed second couplet

old:

a saran wrap cape
crowned in an empty six pack

]]> Comment on poonicorn stand by breeandjames http://thewritinggame.wordpress.com/2008/07/21/poonicorn-stand/#comment-707 breeandjames Tue, 22 Sep 2009 05:35:03 +0000 http://thewritinggame.wordpress.com/?p=190#comment-707 I didn't realize initially how much I enjoy this poem. I didn’t realize initially how much I enjoy this poem.

]]> Comment on at the clark st. ale house by Yana http://thewritinggame.wordpress.com/2009/02/26/198/#comment-705 Yana Tue, 03 Mar 2009 06:44:20 +0000 http://thewritinggame.wordpress.com/?p=198#comment-705 Just dropping by.Btw, you website have great content! Just dropping by.Btw, you website have great content!

]]> Comment on The cursive aphex by dbr http://thewritinggame.wordpress.com/2007/03/17/the-cursive-aphex/#comment-704 dbr Thu, 25 Sep 2008 05:52:24 +0000 http://thewritinggame.wordpress.com/2007/03/17/the-cursive-aphex/#comment-704 bottom, on the large - shoot me into a rock sky; i want your soul. bottom, on the large –
shoot me into a rock
sky; i want your soul.

]]> Comment on Skinny Dipping by Anonymus http://thewritinggame.wordpress.com/2007/06/11/skinny-dipping/#comment-703 Anonymus Wed, 16 Jul 2008 23:52:57 +0000 http://thewritinggame.wordpress.com/2007/06/11/skinny-dipping/#comment-703 This is a crazy story. I agree that the line "You poor man" breaks up it's flow. I love how the story is so emotionless. You can obviously see he's mad but he doesn't show that emotion. It's great. Thanks for writing it. I felt as if I'd known these people in real life. Also I felt I was there. Great detail. Thank you again. This is a crazy story. I agree that the line “You poor man” breaks up it’s flow. I love how the story is so emotionless. You can obviously see he’s mad but he doesn’t show that emotion. It’s great. Thanks for writing it. I felt as if I’d known these people in real life. Also I felt I was there. Great detail. Thank you again.

]]> Comment on weeknights by breeandjames http://thewritinggame.wordpress.com/2008/01/17/weeknights/#comment-702 breeandjames Fri, 20 Jun 2008 13:46:05 +0000 http://thewritinggame.wordpress.com/2008/01/17/weeknights/#comment-702 her toe nails clipped scratching satin sheets scribbling chalk boards screeching brakes on LSD erupt she's pregnant my father lost his directions alarm disarm forbearance. -- dbr her toe nails clipped
scratching satin sheets
scribbling chalk
boards screeching brakes on LSD
erupt
she’s pregnant
my father lost his directions
alarm disarm forbearance.

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dbr

]]> Comment on by Respire http://thewritinggame.wordpress.com/2007/12/19/186/#comment-700 Respire Thu, 19 Jun 2008 00:03:18 +0000 http://thewritinggame.wordpress.com/2007/12/19/186/#comment-700 Somehow i missed the point. Probably lost in translation :) Anyway ... nice blog to visit. cheers, Respire. Somehow i missed the point. Probably lost in translation :) Anyway … nice blog to visit.

cheers, Respire.

]]> Comment on Skinny Dipping by narbonne1944 http://thewritinggame.wordpress.com/2007/06/11/skinny-dipping/#comment-696 narbonne1944 Sat, 01 Mar 2008 00:58:11 +0000 http://thewritinggame.wordpress.com/2007/06/11/skinny-dipping/#comment-696 who wrote this, BJ? who wrote this, BJ?

]]> Comment on by breeandjames http://thewritinggame.wordpress.com/2007/12/19/186/#comment-695 breeandjames Thu, 17 Jan 2008 21:10:44 +0000 http://thewritinggame.wordpress.com/2007/12/19/186/#comment-695 The bones of our history are white bleached, buried and dead. The bones of yesterday curve sharply under pink brown goose bumps. The bones of last night are set in motion or stopped by the clattering of nervous teeth reverberating between inner ears smallest wet bones losing balance lost mind no heart take mine. The bones of our history are white
bleached, buried and dead.

The bones of yesterday curve sharply
under pink brown goose
bumps.

The bones of last night are set
in motion or stopped

by the clattering of nervous teeth
reverberating between inner ears

smallest wet bones
losing balance
lost mind
no heart
take mine.

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